In my second paper, I had one local revision that Carole found in my paper. My original paper said “Assimilations’ negative connotation was also shown in Yoshino’s article” but the issue with this was the apostrophe with the word assimilations. In order to fix this mistake I will take out the apostrophe but keep the “s” at the end of the word. My first draft had no local revision that I had to fix. I try to avoid making many grammatical errors by rereading my paper out loud before I turn it in.

In my second paper, I thought I did well with the structure of the essay. I started with an introduction paragraph and then transitioned to two positive and two negative affects of assimilation. I then concluded my paper with a conclusion to restate my introduction. I need to work on making my papers longer in order to complete the page requirements. I can do this by adding more quotes and explanations.

In my first paper, my sentence wording was confusing at times. For example. my working about the history of enslavement was not always smooth. My diction explaining the “opposite parties’” views of women was also hard to follow. Professor Center suggested that for my “next paper work on reading your paper aloud in order to smooth out your wording.” When looking over my next paper I will use this advice and read it aloud in order to catch any poorly constructed sentences. I did well on making sure all of the words in my paper were spelled correctly as well as my use of commons.